Poem Edit: [formerly "End" now possibly "Round n Again"]
September 26th, 2008 | Published in Uncategorized | 2 Comments
i think this works better: title subject to change
[Untitled]
I met a man today who speaks like you-
I want to tell
you (can’t find your grave, won’t
go) there is nothing warm/ he means
mourning does not end (mourning
cannot end)
he’s speaking
now. I’m behaving badly
writing you while he’s exposed, waiting
for me. I wanna talk so I can pretend
it’s you listening, it’s you
talking back when his voice vibrates
inside my head, smiling about
everything/ you said (everything
you can’t see)
September 29th, 2008at 12:24 pm(#)
i liked the “there is nothing he means that mourning does not end mourning cannot end” – in the new one the meaning seems lost – my simple 2 cents.
also, like the right-alignment, reminiscent of reading arabic – almost tempted to read in reverse – change to subject title: better works this think i!
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October 12th, 2008at 6:45 am(#)
..smh!